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"Great job on emphasizing your points on Soma and the assembly line. These are two powerful symbols that have much purpose in the story. Great job."   http://dannytbuuluu.blogspot.com/

"Awesome thoughts Mia! Your main points were clear and connectable with the book and today's society. Also, your contextual evidence and real world examples help emphasize your points! Great job!" http://mlevyrhsenglitcomp.blogspot.com/2014/02/brave-new-world-essay.html?showComment=1393308377279#c3331789740092621746

"Great job on using Lenina as a great example. Your main points and thoughts helped describe why Lenina was a great example and how characterization can be molded and can be defined by the setting/surroundings. Great job Becky!"  http://rebeccaaldrich.blogspot.com/2014/02/brave-new-essay.html?showComment=1393308793982#c5984826127135444462

"Awesome job Amara! I like the fact that you emphasized on the surroundings, but also on the cultural and psychological surroundings that can mold a person because that's what they face in their inner self. Great job!" http://amarasharpaplit.blogspot.com/2014/02/brave-new-essay.html

"Great job Sarah! You using contextual evidence made your main points even stronger! It was great choice that you described the society of the World State via Bernard and through the way people see Bernard!" http://snstevensenglitcomp13.blogspot.com/2014/02/brave-new-world-essay.html


Now the summary:

What I found was that each essay that I've read illustrated strong points, whether it was about the symbolism and the characterization. All authors that I've read wrote very strong essays that 1. Answered the prompt to the best of their ability and 2. Illustrated their insight with contextual evidence and strong view points.

What I need to include in my essays is probably more insight and more view points. I need to shape/mold my essay with better insight from the book and from connections to reality. What I should avoid is maybe summarizing.